Hey Kim & Vic,

Nice work you two. I loved the Johnny Cash-like musication and the wealth of strong lines, such as:

I’ve ridden high enough to kick around the clouds
Then in a turn, felt buried ,knee deep in the ground

&

Now that silver threads run through my hair
I remember the rocky roads that put 'um there

Still, like Colin, I guess I'd like to know a bit more about what brought him to this place. It doesn't have to be dramatic -- like he just got diagnosed with some fatal disease -- but maybe he's waiting for someone/something at a train station?

Along those lines, I'm not quite sure what you mean by the second line in the chorus. I think you could get some more bang for your buck there. How about something like:

Time is like a train
PASSING BY ME AT THE STATION
Time is like a train
To an unknown destination

That aside, I think this has a lot of potential. I look forward to seeing where you take it.

Good luck,
Beth

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